Tree of the Day - Tuesday May 17, 2005

David Yedwab

this looks totally contrived by man -- nothing natural nor artistic. The curves seem to be there to be curves and the straight portion of the thick trunk is very discordant with the curvy swurvy stuff. JMHO

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DavidN

Uummmmm, sorry to be the butcher this time but I would pull this apart and create individual trees. I would probably discard the middle tree and keep the end two.

Just don't like the composition especially with the trunk movement being opposing.

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mike_p

I was just trying to do some more virtual work on this TOD when my wife walked by, took a look and said,"thats really ugly!" Not being able to disagree with her assessment, I decided to give it up.

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Ashbarns9999

David great virt. #22477 is the way i would have taken. The little tree on the right had good potential. Ash

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Treebeard

I agree with David Yedwab's assessment. I wondered if it would benefit from some more ground cover, covering over the ungainly looped trunk in the middle.



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Crawlings

I agree with DavidN, it actually looks appealing when split into two seperate trees.

Emperor Fish

The problem with this composition - apart from the age of the material used being in direct conflict to the message that it is attempting to portray, are the mirror-image trunks of the main and secondary trunks. Personally, I like to see some conflict in a bonsai, but this is taking things too far.

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Fish,

I agree with your comments about the material appearing so young. Of course, a bold design created early in the life of a bonsai can become something great in time. I think that is where this bonsai is headed. Granted, the trunks aren't truly in a congruent shape, but with some filling in of foliage and appropriate tweaking, this should be less of a sticking point.




David's suggestion of two individual trees is a very straightforward and sensible approach. I still think in the spirit of the thread, the initial idea can be kept and greatly improved. Another great problem to have.

Take care,

John

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bonsaikc

This tree should definitely be a raft. Of course you can't do anything yet with the center tree, the trunk needs to be buried first. I like this tree, though, with that caveat.

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