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15-May-2008
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Constructive criticism wanted... good and/or bad
So I held back on buying a procumbens nana i came across last week, mainly because the guy in the nursery was a jerk. Well today I decided to go get it. Figured I would post it.
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15-May-2008
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bonsaiTALK Journeyman
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After a little work.
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15-May-2008
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bonsaiTALK Journeyman
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And enough work on it for now.
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15-May-2008
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Nice buy Mike!
May want to cut those branches in half to incourage some back budding. Mom
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15-May-2008
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I agree there with mom, it needs some back branches, atm it looks very 2D, unless its just the photo's.
It also looks like the first branch on the left is a bit odd. The angle doesn't look right. Still a good tree. It has ingrown pads 
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16-May-2008
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Perpetual Learner
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Too late now!!
I would have made it a much shorter tree. Remember trunk ratio to height gives a better expression of age. Also some back ward and forward movement of the trunk gives depth. I know it is a two dimensional photo! but I cannot see any movement except sideways. Just my opinion for what its worth. This will get some discussion going!! Pup
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16-May-2008
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Also to go along with Pups' comments, the tree is missing back and front branches. I would think if you let the tree recoup later on you could still use it for a literati form.
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16-May-2008
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BonsaiTalk Enthusiast
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I would go literally too; although the look it already has to me is literally already
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16-May-2008
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bonsaiTALK Artisan
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I agree, cut some of the branches (not all). A few look too long...
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