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Hi David.

Sexy little shohin satski you have there!

On the positive side, I think that the height of the stand to suggest an upland pine is very good - it is not too low. Another positive - the stand is the correct size, certainly wide enough to ground the composition. The accent is also a good size in relation to the main centrepiece bonsai.

The things that I would like to see investigated are the distances between the pieces and the relationship between them. At the moment, the accent is leaning away from the centrepiece, leading the viewer's eye out of the composition. i start by viewing the bonsai, onto the accent satski, the off out to the left of the whole piece. There may be two remedies for this:

1. Try reversing the accent so that it talks to the bonsai.
2. Try reversing the composition, so that the tree is to the left and the accent to the right - what does that look like?

On a separate note, I think that the composition needs a bit more room between the pieces perhaps.

As to the scroll - if you really need one (which I'm not entirely convinced about), you could use something suggesting early summer. The satski does that for me though adequately.

Nice display

Regards,

Fish.

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14-May-2005	#2
Emperor Fish Bonsai Otaku Join Date: Nov-2002 Location: Hants Country: England USDA Zone: 8 ish AHS Heat Zone: 2-3 Posts: 570	Hi David. Sexy little shohin satski you have there! On the positive side, I think that the height of the stand to suggest an upland pine is very good - it is not too low. Another positive - the stand is the correct size, certainly wide enough to ground the composition. The accent is also a good size in relation to the main centrepiece bonsai. The things that I would like to see investigated are the distances between the pieces and the relationship between them. At the moment, the accent is leaning away from the centrepiece, leading the viewer's eye out of the composition. i start by viewing the bonsai, onto the accent satski, the off out to the left of the whole piece. There may be two remedies for this: 1. Try reversing the accent so that it talks to the bonsai. 2. Try reversing the composition, so that the tree is to the left and the accent to the right - what does that look like? On a separate note, I think that the composition needs a bit more room between the pieces perhaps. As to the scroll - if you really need one (which I'm not entirely convinced about), you could use something suggesting early summer. The satski does that for me though adequately. Nice display Regards, Fish. __________________ Old age and treachery will overcome youth and skill. HEALTH WARNING: Engage brain fully, before typing into keyboard. "We are the average gamers and we'll kill you badly. There'll be no finesse. no fancy tricks, no inventive attacks, just 2 whole smg clips and a rain of 'nades."