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bonsaiTALK ArchMaster
Join Date: Oct-2002
Location: Melbourne
Country: Australia
Posts: 3,341
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Hi Al,
I was reading throught Bonsai Today 92 and found an article by Robert Steven about this same topic you are discussing here.
I like what you have done so far but as most other people here I do have a couple of suggestions I would like to make. I believe the shortening of the right branch would improve the composition. I can't be sure why, but it looks good.
My main issue with the composition is on the left side with the second tree from that end which curves away from the way the main trunks. I just don't like it. It takes my focus away from that main trees and the river banks. It just looks unusual and makes my eyes move in the wrong direction to how this composition moves.
I have made some minor adjustments in a few virtuals but I am unsure which I prefer the most. However they are all easier on my eyes.
Thanks for sharing your work Al.
David
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