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Originally Posted by Oysterowl83
Howdy All,
A few months back I styled this juniper, which was given to me as a big bush in a pot. I cleared out alot of branches, and carved up an elaborate jin display. Right now though, I have one long branch which swoops accross the entire piece making up most of the foilage, and one other branch which makes up the foilage on the right. I don't have many branches to work with other than that. How do I develope this piece? Where do you think this piece is going, and what would be suggestions for this piece in the future? Comments, opinions, suggestions, etc., both good and bad are welcomed on this one.
Thanks alot!,
Anthony
P.S. I hate the pot, It will go next year. lol.
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Hi Anthony,
Well, here's a straight opinion about the tree.
The deadwood is very nice. It's well done, and has great movement and dynamicism. (I almost said "vitality", but that's a poor adjective with which to describe deadwood).
The problem is that the live part of the tree stretches far out away from the deadwood, and lacks the sort of movement that you have in the carved portion. As a result, the carving looks like a beautiful ornament instead of like an integral part of the tree.
Also, I'm not a big fan of the current foliage shape. Right now, you've got a classic
mallsai crescent.
So, what to do? That's always the hard part, isn't it?
I don't have easy obvious answers, but I'd suggest that you try to bring the foliage in much closer to the deadwood. Put some significant bends into the living part, and add some deadwood there so that the two parts of the tree tell a consistant story. Refine the living part into foliage pads instead of a big sweeping crescent, and form a well-defined apex.
What do you think?
Best regards,
Carl