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bonsaiTALK Artisan
Join Date: May-2004
Posts: 115
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I see your tree as based on a curvilinear trunk with a triangular piedmont. Each has separate weight and texture. The larger mass is darker and recessive, the smaller is lighter and more prominent. The predominant mass is formed by the trunk leading through the jinn, the secondary of the foliage. As my eye moves up the trunk, I am diverted from the foliage to the outward point of the jinn. They disrupt the free flow, visually, to the apex. Sending my eyes to look right, away from the tree. To me this is discordant. If you follow the trunk line down the tree, you hit a baseline of foliage. The trunk does not have enough visual impact to overcome this divergence, possibly if the lower right foliage were reduced to expose the trunk’s reverse curve, this could be avoided. The line of the trunk appears to end in the jinn. When I first saw the picture I had to look twice to see the connection between the trunk and the foliage, I still find it visually enigmatic.
{edit} I agree with Carl, reducing the mass of the jinn to bring the eye back to the trunk would cause me to the see the whole tree in a more fluid manner.
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