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bonsai is not my hobby
Join Date: Oct-2001
Location: Egling, south of Munich
Country: Germany
Posts: 1,451
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Thomas,
The crown is far to big, the pot is far too big. The crown should be reduced to much less than 50 % of it's present size.
While doing this you should get rid of the symmetry. Considerably reduce one side more than the other. It seems that the left side should be the shorter one.
Get rid of the scalene triangle. This is a mistake. Old trees don't look like this. Make a rounded top. The concept of a scalene triangle is oldfashioned unless you want to show a young tree or a spruce or a redwood or similar. With your tree you definitely want to show a pine tree. Do you realize that junipers never are styled to look like junipers?
The pot kills the tree. It should be one third of the optical weight at present. Besides the size I wonder whether this very masculine pot really fits the tree. I wold prefer a much more feminine pot. After restyling with a rounded shape this should be clear.
Here is my suggestion which should be possible. I would feel comfortable with still reducing the crown and taking out another 50 % of the foliage. Then the pot could still be reduced.
best regards
Walter Pall
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