Ok, now you go and chopped off my favorite branch!
Of course Malhomme is right, you don't want do bonsai design by committee. What ever you come up on your own should be the best. But as a committee member, do I think your tree looks right? The answer is NO!
Seriously, if I had to chop something, I would have kept the first branch and chop everything above it. But what you have now is not bad either. Kinda boring, but safe. After a few seasons, you still have a tall tree with alot of healthy branches, just in time for another styling.
What Vance said about poor back budding on the Hinokis is right. I have a terrible time with them in small pots. After a few years, the foliage just dry up slowly and die back to just a stick of a tree. You lose a branch or two and your design becomes worthless , you what I mean. But if they are in the ground, then they can back bud a little better. Just make sure you have very well-draining potting mix. And keep it consistently moist in the summer. These don't tolerate any salt build up at all.
Good luck!
Si