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bonsaiTALK Master Chief
Join Date: Mar-2004
Country: England
Posts: 1,477
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I agree with Al and Pootsie on this. My first impression was that of a lump of stone with a few too many young trees in it. The rock itself doesn't, for me anyway, convey that of a mountain top, its too smoothly contoured and lacks interest. As Al says, it needs carving and more jaggedness. It needs to feel like its been beaten the crap out of by the elements, not gently caressed by waters of a stream.
In addition, the lower trees look relatively windswept in their positioning. However those at the top look surprisingly tranquil in comparison. I would also expect to see some more shari's and deadwood on the trees, adding to the illusion of a harsh environment.
The bottom tree on the right might also look quite nice semi cascading off the right hand side, once the rock had been carved more to resemble the side of a precipice or cliff face. As the wind appears to be sweeping from left to right in the composition, this would be a slight haven from the elements.
Less is definately more, add interest to the rock allowing for the outline to be seen, and the trees need to match their environment better.
All the best,
Aaron
N.B. Is that just one continuous tree on the right or two separate ones?
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